Brad I cover my approach writing first emails with online dating in my post First Contact Email Examples. In that article I also give some examples of how I would write some first emails based on several random dating profiles.
In this article, I will review some more first dating emails based on advice I gave to a reader. He provided me with three emails he wrote and I reworked them to be closer to what I would have written. I just believe based on my own experience they can be improved upon because sometimes we make our first emails out to be more than they should be. The first thing that grabbed my attention about your profile was your username…I moved to Seattle from Texas a few months ago…I love it out here but I do miss home a lot.
Where are you originally from? I really liked what I read about you and your interests. I try and go to the city whenever I can…it just has a great atmosphere to be in. I love exploring and getting lost and it seems like you are pretty similar in that regard.
I love going to the Space Needle, the museums, and Pike Market just to name a few activities. Lonestar State I really liked your profile!
I realize this might look like not enough but for me keeping it short like this worked well in first emails. Online Dating Email Example 2 Brunch?? Hi there, how are you? How do you enjoy teaching in the city? I recently moved to Seattle for work from Texas and I really love it here so far. You seem like the kind of energetic, open person I might get along with.
I love staying busy, and I can usually have fun doing just about anything. I really want to go to the city as much as I can. Would you like to chat sometime…or since you like brunch so much, maybe meet in the city at somepoint? A teacher in the city? Would you want to grab a coffee together sometime? Again, I just shorten things a lot here.
Hang Gliding Hi, how do you do? You have a great outlook on life, and it seems like a good head on your shoulders. I like to mix up my going out and relaxing nights at home, and always wanted to go sky diving or hang gliding or something along those lines.
As with the earlier emails, I felt this email had too much of him describing himself and describing what he saw in her. Here I started with his basic premise but also ended with that.
Still, as I was writing this I came up with my title and liked it a bit better…but either would work well in my opinion. General Thoughts on These Emails Overall I thought the emails were fine but saw these as the biggest changes: I would shorten the emails. These first emails look like my second emails.
I see the first email as something short and simple to get her to look at my profile. Once she responds, I then move into specifics like favorite this or that. I understand the idea of paying compliments but again I think that comes later or if you are going to compliment her keep it very simple. Then trim down what you wrote like I did.
If you get a response, go back to the first email you wrote and send the rest of it to her. I suggest this because I would hate to see my advice to shorten an email somehow stifle what makes someone unique. I would use an very different photo, though. At any rate, I felt this would give him a good opportunity to see if my advice actually worked and I suspect doing the same could also work for many of my other readers.